One day there was three men working in the mine and they were getting all the coal and gold out of the mine because they were running out of coal and gold. So all the three little men went in the mine and got loads of gold and coal for families and the fires so they didn’t get cold in the middle of the night. Suddenly they all heard trembling and all the rocks were fallen from the roof and the three men all shouted together "GET OUT!" But it was to late it was a giant cream egg fell.
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Miss Potts
13/6/2014 04:08:03 am
Great effort at the 100wc. Next time, I would try to include more interesting words.
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Fiona (Team 100WC)
16/6/2014 07:20:47 am
Well done for thinking of a story around the prompt, Rhianna. You repeat gold and coal a few times, which interrupts the flow a little. I did really like your three little men by the end- I hope they were all okay. Keep up the writing.
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