- One beautiful day three hard working men were in the middle of their break until out of nowhere a huge cream egg fell from the sky. The three men all looked at each other really confused. One of these men said, “Should we get the boss?” but no one replied they were shocked by the huge egg. The three of the men walk really slowly to the egg to investigate one of the men climbed onto the egg but it cracked and all the cream when all over but the man was coved in cream and then they all laughed.
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Miss Potts
10/6/2014 03:57:09 am
Well done for thinking of an interesting idea for your short story. I like how you used inverted commas. Next time, try to improve your punctuation as you have missed some capital letters, full stops and commas.
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Briony
17/6/2014 11:49:08 pm
Thats a very funny short story you are very creative you are also very good writer
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Nicola
17/6/2014 11:56:26 pm
Thank you very much that means a lot.
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Luke
17/6/2014 11:50:07 pm
I think it was very interesting.
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