One day when all three men were working at the plant and then they went to send some stuff through a very big hole but then there was something that was in the middle of the tube and all three men pulled it out. Then all of a sudden there was a huge cream egg and then all of them said “let's try and dig out all of the chocolate so that we can get a lot of food so when we are hungry we can eat it.” Then one of them said "wait a minute let’s just dig in.
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Miss Potts
13/6/2014 04:07:12 am
An excellent effort Matthew. Well done for using inverted commas but remember to start speech with a capital letter.
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Lynda (Team 100WC) from Hartlepool
15/6/2014 05:44:26 pm
My idea of heaven - digging my way into a giant cream egg! A good idea for your story and it worked well with the prompt. I always find it useful to read my stories out loud to myself before publishing. Sometimes when I do that I can hear where it isn't quite right. Read your first sentence out loud to yourself and see if you can find a way to make it better.
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