One of these twins (Ben) decided he would go on an adventure to somewhere he’d never ever, ever been before. He packed all the important things that he thought he would need. He set off as soon as possible. After a while he bumped into a mysterious cave; luckily he had brought a flashing, bright torch. He glanced around and ran towards the corner. He screamed excitedly “It a creme egg!”
One sunny day, there lived 3 tall men, who were the tallest in the whole city. They always thought they were the best because they were bigger than everyone else.
One of these twins (Ben) decided he would go on an adventure to somewhere he’d never ever, ever been before. He packed all the important things that he thought he would need. He set off as soon as possible. After a while he bumped into a mysterious cave; luckily he had brought a flashing, bright torch. He glanced around and ran towards the corner. He screamed excitedly “It a creme egg!”
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Miss Potts
10/6/2014 03:52:48 am
Great effort, Kirsty. I like how you tried to build the excitement at the end of your story. Next time, try to include more interesting adjectives.
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Nicola
12/6/2014 06:41:34 pm
I really like how you put ben in brackes when you said " One of the twins" and I think the story is really funny
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Luke
12/6/2014 06:47:46 pm
I really liked Kirsty's cream egg story because she put Ben in brackets
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