One day there were three men that were working and all of a sudden the three men found a enormous cream egg. The three men were thinking were it could have come from then one of the three men said, “It must have fell from the sky”. Then the three started to put cones around the cream egg after one of them slipped over in the cream egg. The other two men helped the other man out of the cream egg and after they tried to move it. But the three men could not do it then they went home.
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Miss Potts
13/6/2014 04:09:00 am
Well done Courtney. I think this starts very well but you could improve your ending. Try ending on a cliffhanger next time.
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Mrs W Team 100 WC
15/6/2014 05:55:40 am
I also think you've started your 100 word challenge well Courtney. You make it clear straight away that it is the egg that is enormous. You have punctuated the story well. I think you could have made the story a little more exciting, although I know that is hard with only 100 words.
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