One day I went on holiday. When I got there I wanted to go and jump in the swimming pool with my friends, but it was far too hot, so I decided to get an ice cream, but it was far too hot and my ice cream melted straight away, so I decided to go on the bumper cars, but it was far too hot and the metal was hot too. Then I went to get some chocolate, but that melted too! It even said ‘none melting chocolate’ on the label! So I just gave up and went to bed.
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Miss Potts
28/6/2014 01:07:32 am
Great work, Callum. I like how you have repeated the words from the prompt, 'but it was too hot...' several times in your story.
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John C (Team 100WC)
2/7/2014 02:13:04 pm
Hi Callum - I had a smile as I read your story with all the things that didn't work because it was too hot.
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Callum
2/7/2014 07:41:50 pm
Thank you! I couldn't think of anything apart from one day though.
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