One spooky day, my friends and I was walking my dog until we saw something tall and black hidden amongst the trees. We all froze for a minute, then started to tip - toe forward. When we first got to the trees we couldn’t believe what we had found. It was a big tall statue, which stood up as high as the trees. We found a little bit of writing about the statue we had found. My friends and I were starting to read the writing until my friend said “Can we go now? It’s starting to scare me now.”
Leslie
24/10/2014 09:19:47 am
Hello well ur story was really good but I hoped that u added alittle more deatils.
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Mrs Johnson (Team 100)
26/10/2014 04:25:01 am
Hello Courtney. I would love to know what happens next? Your 100 WC entry sounds like an excellent opening to a longer story. I was glad to see some commas and speech marks used in your writing, too - well done!
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Miss Willing
26/10/2014 04:42:43 am
Hi Courtney. I like the opening, but I’m not sure why the day was spooky? You have included good details about how the group of people moved towards the trees to see what was in there. Well done with the inverted commas around the speech.
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