One sunny day, I was walking back from school until I found a small bottle, which had pop in, so I took it home. The next morning I went to get the small bottle of pop and then I drank it. I started to feel dizzy and I fell over and fainted. When I woke up I was petite and I was in another place. Then this little boy came to help me and said "Are you ok?" but then a vicious bird came down and tried to eat me so I ran really fast and then I hid away.
Miss Heappey
16/5/2015 07:29:49 pm
Nice story Rihanna. You have used your imagination well, it reminded me of Alice in Wonderland drinking the potion. Good use of speech marks. Read back through your story to see if you could replace 'and' with a better connective in some places.
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Rhianna
5/11/2015 11:58:55 am
I know this was ages ago but I will try in Parkside
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