One day when I was walking in the hushed countryside I saw a giant log. Curious as to what was on top, I climbed up it only to find some giant seeds and a massive hawk. I was just about to turn around and go back down but then the hawk picked me up in its titanic feet and flew away! I wriggled and squirmed but I couldn’t escape. I was very high now so I gave up on trying to escape as I knew I would die. Just then the hawk dived towards the ground. What would happen next?
Ms. Mc Carthy (100WC) Bangkok
16/5/2015 06:36:08 pm
Hello Callum. I enjoyed your story and love dthe cliff hanger at the end :) You used some great adjectives in your story. To make it even better try using alliteration next time.
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