“I don’t know,” replied Ross,” it looks like the bottom of the bridge.”
“How will we get back up?” Jennifer asked with petrified face.
“What’s this over here?” Ross responded as he walked through a suspicious door.
Will they ever get back up?
One sunny morning, 2 nice children, known as Jennifer and Ross, were wandering around when suddenly, they woke up in the middle of Avignon Bridge in France. They realised a suspicious hovering hole at the end of the bridge. They stepped inside and teleported to a mysterious place.”Wh… where are we?” Jennifer said in a stunned tone.
“I don’t know,” replied Ross,” it looks like the bottom of the bridge.” “How will we get back up?” Jennifer asked with petrified face. “What’s this over here?” Ross responded as he walked through a suspicious door. Will they ever get back up?
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Miss Potts
17/9/2014 05:28:25 am
Fantastic work, Leon. You have tried hard to use a range of punctuation and some powerful word choices to interest the reader. I also like how you ended on a cliffhanger. Next time, make sure that you read through your work carefully to check it all makes complete sense before submitting.
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