Today, I went to see the great Avignon Bridge in France. I went to the end of the Avignon Bridge and I saw out of my own very eyes, a petite little girl (wearing a pink top, purple shorts and wedge trainers) just disappear in thin air. I went to investigate because I wanted to know what had happened to that poor little girl, so I went to the end of the bridge and as funny as it seems, I went to the same place that little girl went, a mysterious new world. I will write again tomorrow.
Dear Diary,
Today, I went to see the great Avignon Bridge in France. I went to the end of the Avignon Bridge and I saw out of my own very eyes, a petite little girl (wearing a pink top, purple shorts and wedge trainers) just disappear in thin air. I went to investigate because I wanted to know what had happened to that poor little girl, so I went to the end of the bridge and as funny as it seems, I went to the same place that little girl went, a mysterious new world. I will write again tomorrow.
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Miss Potts
17/9/2014 05:26:09 am
This is an excellent idea for the prompt, Hannah and I like the part about the mysterious new world. You could improve by including more description with more powerful word choices.
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