*Bang* the highwayman’s gun set of killing his victim then making the rich man tumbled down the green hill into the carefully he snuck away to his armoured horse whilst the law enforcement came riding to the crime scene. When they got there he was trying to get the horse to go quicker but the officers arrested him. Later when he was in a cell the window was blocked be a pipe he already knew the prison was surrounded by a river he had to escape by night. After a few hours when there was no sun in the sky he could fit through and he swam.
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Mrs Fairburn (Team 100 WC -England)
15/3/2015 12:12:10 am
Hello Leon, you have chosen an interesting plot for your story. The introduction grabs the reader's attention straight away. You have chosen some good vocabulary. I wonder if you read it through because it is a little tricky to follow in some parts because punctuation was missing. Try reading it through and make improvements.
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Rhianna
19/3/2015 05:55:08 am
Leon your 100wc is really good I like it how you have put those stars next to bang other than that well done .
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