Once upon a time there was a little girl that was blind,was playing out with her friends in the field.The day after that ,the little girl was just crossing the bridge but there was someone playing with the grit alt bin but she didn’t dare tell him to stop it because he looked older than her.By the time she got to the other side the boy was blind too.The day after that when she woke up.Suddenly the girl was able to see but then she thought of the boy that went blind yesterday.
Miss Potts
11/10/2014 08:15:52 pm
Well done for writing a response to the 100 word challenge, Ciaran. I like how you have tried hard with your punctuation and you had an interesting idea. Next time, try to include more powerful verbs and adjectives.
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Oli (100 WC)
13/10/2014 06:51:42 am
Ciaran, this is a great start for a story idea. Make sure that when you are writing you have a really good idea of your characters. e.g. If the girl was blind, how could she see that the boy was older than her.
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Ciaran
23/10/2014 07:28:51 pm
Thank you!
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